We received feedback from our teacher after we had presented our pitch and this is what she told us to improve on and expand.

The main thing she pointed out to us was that we didn't appear to have a story and instead had a part of a storyline. Maybe turning a short story we

had heard before and turning it into a possible movie plot.

Another thing she pointed out is that night time filming will be difficult to pull off without having a proper lighting setup also CCTV will be hard to use in an abandoned building without our own cctv setup.

She told us to think about questions such as:

What frightens people?

What will the audience see on the screen?

What will the audience think is about to happen?

What is the quest?

Also some things she thought we could include were:

Villain and a hero

Tracking shots

Jump Scares